…or not.

I’m busy with my writing class and am a few hundred words away from my word count goal for the month, so instead of a blog post about writing, I am treating you to a first chapter I might throw away. (There’s another chapter that could do for the first. I haven’t decided.) It’s better to have too many words than not enough. Comments and critique welcome.

Sylvania, Ohio 1898

Adelaide Monroe slumped on the top step of her back porch completely spent and sweat soaked in the morning sun. Not yet mid-morning and already the heat of a warmer than normal July had made the usual farm chores torture, with humidity thick and oppressive. If she could slice the air into blankets to save for later, she would never suffer another cold winter. After an hour spent chasing and capturing two dozen errant chickens, she was spent. Damned the hen that discovered a small tear in the wire; the miscreant had led the rest of the flock to giddy freedom. Addie cursed herself for forgetting how crafty (albeit stupid) chickens could be. She mended the breach with twine and with the help of her collie, Skippy, finally marshaled the truants back to their coop. She would catch a brief respite before collecting the day’s eggs.

Addie wiped the sweat from her brow with the hem of her apron and surveyed the small farm landscape. After spending a year at the Cleveland Normal Teachers’ Preparatory, life in rural Sylvania seemed dull indeed. It was also extremely primitive. Cleveland was no New York City, but at least it hummed with commerce and culture and the promise of progress. Six weeks back in her childhood home, and Addie yearned for the modern conveniences of indoor plumbing and electricity. During her spare time at the Preparatory, she had enjoyed many strolls along Millionaire’s Row, imagining herself as a lady serving high tea in one of the magnificent mansions on Euclid Avenue. She’d attended a high tea at one of Cleveland’s finest hotels as a guest of the school, and thought the experience to be the pinnacle of her experience. She’d attended concerts and plays both indoors and out. She even found wonder in watching the busy factories churning out smoke as well as tobacco and woolens, and would sometimes spend her Saturday afternoons at the docks, observing ships as they entered and left the port, all the while dreaming of where they’d been and where they were going next.

With each passing day in her hometown, Addie saw the promise of her bright future flicker away, a slow expiration into darkness. While she loved children and had wanted to teach, doubts had begun to spring up where the light had once been.

“Addie! Addie!” The screen door opened wide, hitting Addie in the back. She sprang up to face her mother. “Dear God, girl, I didn’t see you sitting there. Did I hurt you?”

Addie swept straw and dirt from her clothes. “No, Mama. Chickens got out again. We might need new wire. This coop is older than I am.”

“Don’t have the money, girl. We’ll make do until we really need it. Get yourself cleaned up. I want you to make a delivery to Dr. Randall.”

Addie groaned. The town doctor had an eye for Addie. Addie’s eyes fixed on a different horizon. “You can’t go?”

Martha Monroe crossed her arms and frowned. She was an imposing woman, raven haired and stout like Addie, although a foot shorter, with the same moon-round face and blue eyes. “Dr. Randall doesn’t want to see an old woman like me. He needs a dozen eggs and I talked him into buying one of the strawberry rhubarb pies I just baked and you’re going to take it to him before lunch time. I’ve got wash to hang and a long row of green beans to hoe and tomatoes to stake.”

“I’ll trade.” Addie offered.

Martha shot Addie a stern, no-nonsense glare. “Adelaide Monroe, you could do much worse than to have a doctor for a suitor. Why Doctor Randall is a fine man! He’s taken a shine to you, a real shine. None of the other girls in town have a chance, I tell you. Don’t be a fool. I wouldn’t let that one get away.”

“Yes, Mama,” Addie said sadly.

Martha had turned to enter the house when she noticed the egg basket empty. “What? No eggs today?”

Addie picked up the basket and headed for the chicken coop. “I’ll get them.”

 

Addie could have walked the two miles to Sylvania, but she chose to take the horse cart, telling her mother she did not want to ruin the delicate pie by walking it to Dr. Randall under the fierce sunshine. The truth was it was too hot for walking, even had she changed into short sleeves and a shorter cotton skirt. Her wide-brimmed straw hat kept the sun out of her eyes, but at the expense of a river of sweat pooling at the band.

Addie liked taking the wagon into town, if only to stealthily travel beyond the village. She’d started urging the horse on the road south a half-mile beyond the town limit, which later became a mile, then farther. One day she hoped to make it to Toledo; maybe then she’d sprout courage and keep going until she reached the Gulf of Mexico or until the horse gave out.

Dr. Randall’s imposing three story home on the town square was the finest in Sylvania, although it now seemed a paltry shack compared to the mansions lining Cleveland’s Millionaire’s Row. He’d inherited it and the practice from his father, the late Dr. Joseph Randall. The first floor held a reception area and patient rooms, with living quarters above. Addie loved the old Dr. Randall, with his steady bedside manner and jar full of hard candy he used to reward good children. He could tame the most difficult patients with a sweet smile and a wry joke.

Dr. Jacob Randall, Princeton educated, tall, dark, and sophisticated, was a few years older than Addie. As much as the elder Dr. Randall seemed the jolly, grandfatherly type, the younger Dr. Randall fell short – at least in Addie’s eyes. He was pretty, yes, but his shiny exterior lacked sincerity. She’d spent the last month and a half avoiding him, pushing past him quickly when leaving church services or the dry goods store, and hiding upstairs in her bedroom when he came to call – which he hadn’t done once the entire time she was at school in Cleveland. His dogged pursuit was obvious, but at twenty-two, Addie was not yet ready to settle into domestic life.

Addie entered the square noting much of Sylvania had folded up in the heat. The streets were quiet and empty. Smitty from the Western Union office sat on a battered oak dining chair on the sidewalk outside the door, hatless, baking in the sun, the only human in sight. He squinted at her and gave a wave which she returned. Addie turned the wagon in front of the doctor’s house, dismounted, and tied the horse to the hitching post, before she returned for the pie and eggs.

She steeled herself for the task at hand, wondering how she could appear disinterested without seeming rude. Her pointed avoidance hadn’t sunk in with the good doctor. Addie made it halfway up the sidewalk when the front door opened. “Addie Monroe! It’s so nice to see you.” Dr. Randall greeted her. He bounded across the porch and down the steps, his long legs like a gazelle taking the plain. Not only was he pleasing to look at, with thick dark hair and handlebar mustache, he had a charisma that drew women to him – or so Addie’s mother claimed. Addie had never fallen under the spell, if one existed. He was smartly dressed in light trousers, his Oxford shirt sleeves rolled up to the elbow, a jaunty bow tie at his neck, not a hair out of place, and completely cool.

Addie stepped back as he approached, holding her items as a shield in front of her. “Hello, Doctor Randall.”

“Please, Addie, call me Joshua. We’re friends, aren’t we?” Dr. Randall winked at her. He winks too much. Excessive winking would be considered a lecherous move if he weren’t a professional man.

“You should get the pie in the ice box right away, Dr. Randall,” Addie said. She offered it to the doctor, who made no move to take it. She was forced to fill the space between them with small talk. “I take it you’re not busy today?”

“It appears not. Winter is my bread and butter, what with colds and consumption and falls from icy conditions. I guess it’s too hot to get sick.” He laughed.

“I see.” A moment of uncomfortable silence passed between them. “I really must go, Dr. Randall. Thank you.” Addie urged the pie and basket of eggs on the doctor, before she quickly turned to retreat.

Dr. Randall circled around her to cut her off. “I thought you might want a glass of iced tea before you head back. It’s dangerously hot today. There’s also the question of payment. Your mother’s expecting it, I’m sure.”

Iced tea would have been wonderful but she declined. “Thank you for the offer, but I have chores. As for Mama, you can settle up with her.”

“But…”

Addie took two steps toward her horse cart, leaving Dr. Randall on the sidewalk behind her. Smitty came tearing toward them from the telegraph office across the street, his hands clutching a white piece of paper. She’d never witnessed the old man run. “Miss Addie! Miss Addie!” was all he could say until he stopped in front of her. Addie raised her eyes to the heavens and thanked the Lord for this distraction, but the look on Smitty’s face was a combination of sadness and horror. Her mother bore the same expression right after her father had died.

“What’s the matter, Smitty?” Addie grabbed Smitty’s arm. “What is it?”

Panting, he handed Addie the paper. She struggled to decipher Smitty’s hurried scrawl.

10 July 1898

Mrs. T.J. Monroe, Sylvania, Ohio

URGENT. Regret to inform you death of S. Monroe, Colorado Springs, 4 July. Request guidance RE: disposition of property. Awaiting response.

Yours

N. Hastings

“Miss Addie? Miss Addie?”

Smitty’s voice called, a thousand miles away, throwing a lifeline to her heart, a tether to the present. Behind her, Dr. Randall’s hand reached for her shoulder, but she shrugged it off, not needing his support and sympathy, not caring of his intentions. This was not a time for weakness; her next task called for fearless mettle, and she couldn’t waste a second of time. Without a word, she folded the telegram into thirds and marched back to the horse cart.

There would be no furtive outings on the road to Toledo, no dreams of somewhere else, not today. She had news to break to her mother.

 

 

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The best books not only have relatable characters you can fall in love with (or hate), they also must convey a sense of place. I think about The Hunger Games, a dystopian setting that is removed from today’s time, or Harry Potter, which happens in an exaggerated British landscape (a bit of past, present, and future), or even sci-fi (which admittedly I haven’t read much of since junior high school), where the author must not only create the characters and the plot, they have to make outer space believable. I know that I have to BE there in the setting, even if there is imaginary. It’s easier to enjoy a book or movie if I’ve actually visited the place. For years, because I loved the place, I read books and watched movies about San Francisco. It didn’t matter the time frame or the genre, I loved the connection to the place.

When I wrote my first novel, Finding Cadence, I incorporated a lot of my personal life into the book, and consciously wrote it in three parts. Place, as well, occurred in three parts: first Michigan, then Colorado, and finally California. For me, place was an intrinsic part of the story. Cadie became a different person in all three places, and while I didn’t realize it when I wrote the book, her journey between the three places marked her growth as a person.

I have very little problem in settings in my books. If anything, because I used to write travel reviews, I tend to go overboard with description. I want whomever reads my work to know exactly where I was and how it affected me.

I’m working on a new novel specifically for my online class with Michelle Richmond. It’s a story about a woman who moves to 1898 Colorado Springs from northwestern Ohio after her brother dies. (Good thing I live here now! And I’m well aware of northwestern Ohio.) She and her mother don’t know it, but he had taken his gold mining money and invested it into real estate in Colorado Springs. It’s not a lot – not like a mining or railroad millionaire might achieve back in the day, but it’s enough for him to buy a large tract of land where he has just completed an enormous mansion in the middle of nowhere. I’m not going to give away what is going to happen, mainly because I’ll probably change my mind regarding the plot, plus I’d like to generate interest for book sales! (Duh.)

So for the last week, besides dutifully finishing my online homework and writing the first chapter, I’ve taken long walks in some of the open space around here. It’s amazing to me that within a few miles of my house (walking distance), I can go to where the land is largely unchanged from the last 120 years. I can stand in a field or canyon and imagine myself back then.

North Cheyenne canyon at the edge of Stratton Open Space. Behind the local high school.

I’ve also visited a couple of local landmarks, places I’d never seen and I grew up here. Miramonte Castle in Manitou Springs was built in 1894. Built by a French priest/architect, it’s a mishmash of nine architectural styles and is a bit much.

The sandstone fireplace at Miramonte. The castle is a bit much, but I’m stealing this for my novel!
Fr. Francolon sat here.

I also toured Glen Eyrie, General Palmer’s castle north of Garden of the Gods. (General Palmer founded Colorado Springs.) Built in the 1890s, it’s a beautiful English style mansion constructed on stunning grounds surrounded by rock formations.

The fireplace at the one room schoolhouse in Glen Eyrie

In my research, I realized that Colorado Springs wasn’t all backward and pioneer in the late 1800s. The time might have been before the widespread use cars and the telephones, but Glen Eyrie had indoor plumbing and a call system and central vacuums among other conveniences. I’m glad I toured these two places because otherwise my story might have contained some glaring errors.

It’s also good to get a feel for the homes of the era, the clothing and artifacts help with the description of setting.

I can’t write a story without becoming the character, seeing where she has gone and experiencing her struggles. Good books go beyond the story alone; they make you think about them long after you’ve reached the words “The End.”

It takes a little extra time and a lot of extra effort, but the payoff is deep.

More later…

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I am happy to report that I have not fallen off the New Year resolution wagon – just yet.

I’ve started a new online class, under the direction of Michelle Richmond. There are lots of very talented writers in the class, but instead of wallowing in envy, I’m keeping my head down and working hard. In addition to the class, I’m using the same exercises for the novel I just completed for NaNoWriMo. Win! Win! Win!

This new novel is about a woman in 1898 Colorado Springs, and the tentative title is “An Education for Addie.” While not a true historical novel (I’m concentrating on Addie, who must struggle through many challenges), there will be some research involved. I can’t just plop a character back in time 121 years without paying some attention to detail! Unfortunately, El Paso County doesn’t have a historical society (!) and I’m hitting wall after wall on the internet. *sigh* Whoever said writing a novel was easy probably sold a bridge to a sucker in Brooklyn.

My morning walk. And the setting for the novel.

I have to blame my current writing interest in my surroundings. And the last novel too. There is something alluring about the crisp air, the clear blue skies, and the wind whipping through the arroyo that gets my head thinking.

In addition to the writing class, I’ve kept up with the Hobonichi and am (slowly) making the edits on the last manuscript. I have committed to reading, too, and finished my second reading of Ramona by Helen Hunt Jackson. I read it the first time in 7th Grade, when I decided to pick the biggest, hardest book to read in the school library. It was difficult to become accustomed to late 19th Century prose, but after the first thirty pages I was hooked. Not unlike the first time I read the book. I’m also still walking, about 4-5 miles a day when the temperatures are over 40 degrees, which is nearly always.

All of this success through my bout with sickness, my husband’s bout with the crud (like mine only infinitely worse), and the holidays. YAY ME!

It’s also Dry January, so I cannot drown my sorrow in a gin martini when things get tough. No, I must suffer through, just as my character, Addie must. Her life was a thousand times harder than mine.

Next week, I plan on discussing character development. No, really.

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Let’s face it: December is always a ‘phew’ month for me.

Nine times out of ten, I’m taking a breather from NaNoWriMo. This year I finished with days to spare, and started working on the first pass-through before November ended.

Then, with the first of December…crushing stagnation…

With the holidays, I’m used to rushing around like a crazy woman, buying presents for family, friends, and co-workers, preparing for meals and days off, etc. This year, in our new house, with hardly any socializing on the schedule and no employees to worry about, I fell into a laziness I haven’t seen in many years.

I’m usually too busy to be lazy, and even if I procrastinate, I manage to cram in as much as I can in a day.

December was mostly laid-back (perhaps a little too much so).

December was also mostly sunny and warm. That’s because we live in Colorado now, where winters are mild. I spent a great deal of time outdoors, walking in the sun! I’m tan all the time now!

With the walking comes the thinking, and I’ve been thinking about how to approach the rest of my life, now that I’m jobless, i.e. retired. I have so many partially finished projects laying about, as my unpacking has proven, with lots of half-finished jewelry and cross stitch and needlepoint and a crazy quilt I started in 1985. I love starting things, especially stories, flushed with the excitement of new places to go and worlds to create. Beginning a new story is easy for me.

Unfortunately, kicking myself in the rear to complete second and third drafts is something else. I don’t particularly like to edit. It’s very hard work. I can see the stories in my head, even the un-fleshed parts are finished in the brain, but getting them out there and onto the page – that’s another thing.

This year’s resolutions are simple:

  1. Finish the unfinished. I have no less than four manuscripts in the rough draft mode on my computer. I really need to work on those, even as it pains me.
  2. Take a class. Already signed up for a writing class, and will see about an art class.
  3. Work on the web site(s). Again, laziness has reared its ugly head and I really need to tame that particular monster.
  4. Investigate more on the self-pub aspect of the business. With the changes in CreateSpace and Amazon, I really need to grab this bull by the horns.
  5. Keep up the daily journal. My Hobonichi went to hell after the first week of December. And I was doing so well, too!
  6. Put myself on a schedule. All of this could be easily accomplished if I stuck to a schedule. Now that major house repairs have been completed, this should be easy. (Plus, the husband got a new job he’s starting on the 9th. It’ll be nice to have some alone-time. He’s kind of a distraction.)
  7. Enter some contests. I’ve been out of contest mode for several years. Time to dive back in.

The media folks say that New Year’s resolutions are usually broken and fall to the wayside by the middle of January. This year, I’m out to prove them wrong.

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Today is the official last day of NaNoWriMo, and I hope everyone who participated this year either completed the challenge or made a valiant effort. After all, it’s the effort that counts.

I was on friggin’ fire this year! I was able to get over 50K words by the 26th.

I’ve spent the last few days getting caught up on other things. As soon as I post this, I’ll start to go over what I’ve written, which likely is a mess. I do this completely old school – with a notebook by my side. I wish I could figure out Scrivener, but I’m hopeless.

This year, I worked without notes. I only had a vague idea of the characters and an even vaguer idea of the story line, so I’m amazed I finished at all.

A few things I’ve learned this year:

1. It helps to have time – lots of time. Now that I’m retired from the working world, I not only had tons of time, I had absolutely no headaches from the Day Job to worry about. Talk about having a sack of boulders lifted…what a change!

2. It helps to have a passion about what you’re writing about. I took a story “ripped from the headlines” and turned it on its ear. I had a feeling the other side (of the real life story) was lost to the world. It helped to open up a case of righteous indignation and play from that angle.

3. It helps to let your characters go. I wrote a couple of chapters that completely floored me. I had no idea where these people were going (certainly not where I would have gone!), but I let them take the lead. I found those two chapters to be the most interesting in the work.

So now I have basked in my limited glory. It’s time to get the red pen out.

For those who are still working, keep at it. It’s not over until midnight!

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We are up to Day 12 of the 2018 NaNoWriMo, and my total word count is just over 23,000 words.

YAY! Applause! Confetti!

This even after taking three and a half days off from writing. (I visited the great north – Duluth, Minnesota. It was cold, very cold. I would have rather been writing, but what can you do?) We returned yesterday where I cranked out a few words in between laundry and unpacking and checking out the damage my cat did (minimal, he’ll live).

One thing I noticed now that I’m nearly a third of the way through is that I’m still bogged down in the beginning. This is because I love me some back story! I just can’t get out of the back story!

During today’s session, I decided to plant my characters in the middle of the middle. (Which I approximately know since I know what occurs during the beginning, the middle, and the end. If you have a faint idea, you can actually start anywhere and write. Writing the ending first is really an interesting exercise.) It was a slow start, but I think I can push on from here.

The main point I’m trying to get across in my story is that women (girls) can be just as evil and conniving as men, and when any human of any gender is like that, they should get punished in the end.

Eventually (thirty years later), my antagonist is going to get punished, but at this time I’m trying to make her as mean and unlikable as possible. This is hard to do when you want people to live in peace and have a kumbaya moment every time there’s a wrinkle.

But…you need those wrinkles.

Thanksgiving is coming up, and I hope to have most of this novel finished by then. At least, I want a little more than a rough sketch, something I can really sink my teeth into once November is over.

How’s your NaNoWriMo coming along? Remember, it’s the consistent writing that makes it happen. I’ve spent NaNoWriMo in abject failure by Day 14, so I know the feeling of non-accomplishment. Push yourself. It doesn’t have to be good, it just has to BE.

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I would have to say that my first week of NaNoWriMo 2018 (heck! my first four days!) has been so productive!

My word count as of end of yesterday (Day 4) is well over 12,000 words!

Yay, me!

(I don’t want to celebrate too much, as a lot of things can happen between now and November 30 and too much happy dancing can jinx any good thing. Sickness, travel, things come up that will get between you and your story. Life doesn’t stop just because it’s November!)

I’ll make this brief as I need to get back to the story while I’m still on fire. (Zzzzzzzssshhhhh…hear that? It’s bacon sizzling. Or my fingers.) I’ll just impart a few observations since starting this tale:

  1. If you’re out of stories to write about, rip something from the headlines. I don’t normally do this, but what a great idea! We are novelists, not journalists, so creative license gives you permission to make things up and spice things up.
  2. Don’t be afraid to let a character take you to places you didn’t think you’d want to go. (Remember, I didn’t do much planning on this story, didn’t have time with moving and remodeling. I basically just played with names and settings and basic story line.) You want to come away from your session with the computer like I did Saturday thinking “Wow! Did she really just do that?”
  3.  Try sitting in an uncomfortable chair, as you might type faster. I’m sitting at my kitchen counter, and while the chairs are fine for a quick snack, sitting on them for longer than an hour is kind of a pain. My comfy purple writing chair survived the move from Michigan and is right across the room, but I’ll pass. I’m afraid I’ll get swallowed up in it.
  4. Take a few minutes to read in your genre. I finished Rust and Stardust by T. Greenwood (one of my favorites) at the end of October. However, I wouldn’t recommend picking up a new book that will consume you and your precious time. Just read a few pages out of a favorite book in your collection. Don’t start at a chapter, pick a random page or two in the middle and commit to only two pages.
  5. Also important, don’t forget physical activity. We’ve had some cold and snow in Colorado this week, which happens. As soon as the temperatures get past 39 degrees, I head out the door, even if it’s just for a mile or two. Walking is a great way to clear your head. You might be pleasantly surprised what ideas might pop up too.

Well, back to the salt mines! I can’t wait to see where we’re going today.

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